I have tried to outpace you — May 23, 2006
The last three lines ARE the best! And I really like the last six lines, including "contrive to ride in the same car as you."
You're right, Donna! I meant the last six lines, and I am going to edit the post to reflect that. Thank you!
Good. Publishable, but just possibly you could find other words rather than "acres", "quiver" and "longing". But of you keep "acres," close with a period after it and begin a new sentence in the next line. (Two cents.)
The last three lines ARE the best! And I really like the last six lines, including "contrive to ride in the same car as you."
You're right, Donna! I meant the last six lines, and I am going to edit the post to reflect that. Thank you!
Good. Publishable, but just possibly you could find other words rather than "acres", "quiver" and "longing". But of you keep "acres," close with a period after it and begin a new sentence in the next line. (Two cents.)